February 25, 2017 at 4:14 am
Indeed – this is such an important topic and a difficult process trying to document a history of the present ….
Hopefully you can work on a way to elaborate and focus some points earlier on to lead up to this conclusion.
See in context
February 24, 2017 at 4:32 pm
from this para on to the next two or three you are talking about the common perception regarding technology and gender. I have found Janet Abbate’s work on “Recoding Gender” useful in explaining this points as well.
February 24, 2017 at 4:13 pm
[became the central hub]
when you say that it became a central hub – is this your observation – or do you have a citation – if it is your observation – can you point to a rationale for how you see this as a central hub?
February 24, 2017 at 4:10 pm
I agree with Carol in that GG was not a cohesive “organized” movement – unless you are able to provide evidence that it was. In fact you contradiction your self by first noting that a movement was organized and then stating that it is a “so-called” movement.
February 24, 2017 at 8:00 am
adding to Carol’s – when you point to the “reestablishment of technological control” in the next para – perhaps ground the nature of tech control you are talking about. And are we also talking about “technology” as it is represented, narrated within the game. There is a sort of “remediation” of non digital tech within this tech space and associated with technomasculinity – what is happening here?
February 24, 2017 at 7:20 am
Perhaps if you started with what you are seeing in the contexts you are drawing from for making the arguments – start with that and how those connect up to the larger theoretical points (all excellent but don’t seem grounded in evidence from your research when we first read them) ….
There is a theoretical commentary and then there is the actual study of the resistance. Starting with instances of resistance may allow you to unpack the intersectional nature of this resistance and help us understand how this is specific to black lesbians (if it is) and also note what else is going on.
Roopika and Carol have given you good feedback too.
February 24, 2017 at 7:15 am
As I’ve noted elsewhere on this review. The idea of the article is a good one. However there is a need for more background and contextualization as well as clarity of definitions for the argument to work and get clearly conveyed to our readers.
I agree with several of the suggestions from the other reviewers as well.
February 24, 2017 at 7:08 am
Yes, the virtual world is a space for community building and networking between women of color. But it’s also a space for women of color to showcase their hobbies and talents. Typically they have limited access to transportation and economy. Sharing their photographs and blogs give them a sense of fulfillment. Sometimes, it even becomes a marketplace for these women. I think if you include this discussion in forging a sisterhood in cyberspace, it would diversify the discussion on cyberspace, diaspora and building sisterhood. Amy Bhat of UMBC has done some work on this.
February 24, 2017 at 6:49 am
A very well constructed and theoretically robust essay by Kruger. Kaur’s combination of poetry and art to form sisterhood for women of color is fascinating effort to create a space for women of color. Kaur’s work focuses on the ownership of her body and questions the white feminine constructs of less body hair. Kruger asks the right questions here if Kaur is rewriting ideas of nationalism and heterosexuality as a disciplining measure.
However, I was left wondering about the place of class in Kaur’s writing. Diaspora is not monolithic, there are shared identities based on culture, class and religion.
Secondly, from this essay it was not very clear if Kaur has presence in other networking sites? A few things would help to establish her reach with her audience, her followers, the kind of comments she gets. Since you refer to Kaur’s comment on the removal of her images from Instagram, this would make the argument complete.
Overall, it’s a great piece, but plugging these few holes would make it a robust essay.
February 22, 2017 at 11:56 am
I like the framing of this essay as a crucial rhetorical question. My sense is that the essay would benefit from a tighter framework and maybe one more focused on the work you did with your co-researchers. To begin with, the literature review could be condensed and perhaps could incorporate some science and technology studies work on race (Alondra Nelson is the first author who comes to mind). But you’d also need to conceptualize the review in such as a way that leads directly into your own research. Expanding and elaborating on that research — and being more specific about the concrete ways in which your research sought to address the question you pose in your title — seems your singular contribution to the body of literature on this topic.
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